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you cut yourself
with the burnt out 
ends of cigarettes,
and drown yourself 
inside of my eyes,
because i cannot help
you.

when did you become
just another mess
of strong liquor and
nicotine promises?
we swore 
that we'd stay by each other
even with the face of Hell
clawing down our throats.

sometimes
i want to shake you and scream
that it does get better. 
it does and it will and
it always will, you foolish
child. i love you. 
i say this
because you are my heart 
and how can a woman live
without blood in her veins?
i don't even know what i feel.
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Roshiray Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
me neither,but it does hit home..thank you again...you help me to think with these writings,you are the BEST !Hug Heart +fav 
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Student Writer
awe thank you :love:
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wordslikewater Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is beautiful! It's very intense and emotional.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Student Writer
thank you :heart:
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crooked-clockwork Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013   General Artist
You've been featured in my Art of the Week poll!
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Student Writer
wow thank you!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very intense
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Writer
thank you!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely beautiful. I'm sorry you're feeling this way, but this really is...a gorgeous poem.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Writer
thank you. & it's alright.
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JayDanjerCobain Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this, especially 
"when did you become
just another mess
of strong liquor and
nicotine promises?"
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Student Writer
thank you!
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013   Writer
You render such sincere and raw emotion. Your style of writing is efficacious. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Student Writer
thank you very much. :)
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013   Writer
;)
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AJ-Dion Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
This is great.  The last two line have so much impact too.  :D (Big Grin) 
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! 
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smallsincerities Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, this is beautiful :love:
The only nit-picking I have for this piece is:
"and how can a women live
without blood in her veins?"
Should 'women' be 'woman'?
That is all. I love all your poems, they're so powerful :)
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Student Writer
thank you!
& yes it was! haha i always do that. :)
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De7h1nK13 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I love all your poetry... its just so raw and real

 

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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Student Writer
thank you :heart:
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De7h1nK13 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

yuppers lol

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