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at 8:54 p.m., i realize
that i love you more
than the sun loves the moon,
the sea
and the sand and shells,
and more
than the wind loves the
rain. 

i love you like
i love the last drag
of a cigarette,
the humming of the air
before a thunderstorm 
and 

i love you like
i love my blankets after
work, like i love my habit
of turning off
every single light
before i go to
bed.

you are more
than how the sky looks
and midnight 
in the dead of winter;
that perpetual ink-spill of
pink;
and you 
are more dear to me
than the thousands of words
i have written. 

if i could
i would put the world
into my palm
and then burn it, 
torch it all and pick away
at the flaming remains and
i.o.u's
until i can paint a life
in ashes
so that it half way resembles
what i feel 
for you.
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JohnAshleigh Jan 22, 2014  Professional Writer
Such purity of emotion is charming. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
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solis-ortus Jan 25, 2014  Student Writer
thank you :)
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JohnAshleigh Jan 25, 2014  Professional Writer
:D
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learningtobefree Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
the sea
and the sand and shells,
and more
than the wind loves the
rain.

that part seems sort of unnecessary, in my opinion. the opening of your poem would be much sharper if that were omitted. just a thought. 
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solis-ortus Jan 25, 2014  Student Writer
alright thank you :3
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shep4life Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
intense
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solis-ortus Jan 25, 2014  Student Writer
thank you 
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shep4life Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome!
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solis-ortus Jan 25, 2014  Student Writer
c:
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