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there's a boy i know
who used to swallow coins
like hard candy;

tree sap
stuck to his chin
from my own hands,
September
lucid in our lungs
and the road
a blur from our sadistic words.

he doesn't believe in hell
and
neither do i.

but i believe in the stars 
and i want to know what happens to them
when they die.


i don't know if i like this.
edit: wow i got a DD and i cannot breathe. thank you all.
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RestlessSands Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014
:)
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SpiderwebWisher Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hello, I'm a contributor for LiteratureRoadtrip and you have been featured in this week's Friday Feature! Thank you! :heart:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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SpiderwebWisher Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: You're welcome! :hug: 
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chewyraezen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love this! :)
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:iconsolis-ortus:
solis-ortus Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Student Writer
thanks! :D
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chewyraezen Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome! :)
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blubbityblub Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
YOU GOT IT, MADAMWOE :D Congratulations. I knew it was always a matter of time, and I'm genuinely happy for you! Well done :)
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so so much :)
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013   Writer
Nice work and congratulations on a DD!  :la:

I particularly love the last stanza.  It leaves the reader with something to think about.  And I love how the title implies stars as in celebrities but the poem seems to lead more into stars as in the ones that dot the night sky.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much :heart: & it's actually my best friend who gave me the idea :)
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013   Writer
That's awesome!  :D

My best friend and I are both writers, so we enjoy collaborating and giving each other ideas, too.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Student Writer
that's sweet :D
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Time-Signature Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist

Beautiful~

Congrats on the DD!

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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student Writer
thank you!
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Time-Signature Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome~
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! :D
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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Lou-Sifer Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hehe I don't think you saw this coming at all :3 Well congratulations with it ^^ I'd like to go into depths with it but find myself so very tired. well I read it and I liked it :3
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much!
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Lou-Sifer Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're very welcome indeed ^^
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist
it's always funny how atheists can believe in stars but not hell
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Xaldinpwn Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
You must be a special kind of stupid, aren't you? You can see stars, plain as day.
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist

son, you can't even tell the difference between smart and intelligent

 

what if stars are the portholes that 'the metaphysical', what peons(Christian or atheist) call god (as they cannot discern between the subtle textures; things are black or white in their eyes), punches through to feed us?

 

 

oh yeah, let me remind you that everything physically tangible, has been derived from the sun

 

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Xaldinpwn Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
k
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist
hahahhaa, kids
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Xaldinpwn Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
I'm not some kid. I just know that whenever I get into these kinds of arguments, they never end and they become silly flame wars.
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist
I didn't argue anything. youre the one who can't see past the chemical-names given to the gasses, combusting, in the star's core
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Xaldinpwn Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
I simply take them for what they are, huge flaming gases. Some people see them as something divine.
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Haha what? I'm Christian and I can't see the logic in what you just said.
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist
yeah because you settled for Christianity(tm)
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:iconaspecialkindofstupid:
Wanna hear a funny story? I'm not christian. I just thought my argument would sound more convincing if I said that I was. I'm actually Neo-Pagan.
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013   Writer
I'm a Christian and I understood the poem.

A person's religion (or lack thereof) has absolutely nothing to do with their intelligence or ability to understand and appreciate art.  That was a totally unnecessary comment.
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C-onsulting Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
(( I think that person mistook the meaning of "Believing in the stars". I think they meant "Why is it that atheists believe in heaven but not hell?". ))
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Yeah I can see that being a possibility.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student Writer
why? stars are science; hell is religion. they have no correlation to each other. 
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist
just because you believe something doesn't mean that it's not bullshit
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student Writer
i still don't see what that has to do with atheists. or stars. 
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Student General Artist
or the yin yang, right?
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Student Writer
what? 
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aWay-with-knives Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Student General Artist

the thing is, you are too quick too dismiss, when youre an atheist. I'm not saying I'm better, I'm saying Christianity is a matter of dressing-up atherism in the clothing of spirituality.

 

 

the yin yang symbolises duality. think about how I cannot prove to you, legitimately, that there is an electrical charge animating your muscles (including your brain), but I can tell it is there because we converse. atheism/christianity is seeing in black and white, when reality's a rainbow

 

you bring the smoke I'll bring the beer

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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Student Writer
... i'm not an atheist. i'm jewish. 
how about you stop assuming you know anything about anyone okay?
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randaline11 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
 love this :)
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student Writer
thank you :)
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randaline11 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
You are very welcome. :)
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Iruleimawesome Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow deep :iconrespectplz: you've got my stamp of approval
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student Writer
thank you :)
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Iruleimawesome Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No prob :D :iconapprovalplz:<- here's the stamp
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rainslick Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
this is really nice, I love this. so evocative.

congrats on the dd.
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