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November 16, 2013
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a guide to 
sweet talking a girl into her

i) tell her she's beautiful 
and that she looks 
like she fell straight from heaven's top 10
and landed with crash
on your lap. ask her to come home
with you. keep

ii) touch her hair when she 
sleeps, just to reassure her
that you're there,
and make a promise to her
that you won't just write about her 
when you're stoned. say,
"i'll write about you every time i 
breathe, baby."

iii) keep telling her 
that it's not too soon, that, yes
it's okay to love again
and that she's only human,
after all. everyone makes mistakes,
you know, and he
was a massive one.

iiii) start to realize
that maybe she's not your princess
trapped in a tower; 
in fact, she's more like 
a dark hearted teenager 
convulsing in the corner 
of her own thought process, and
wonder if you want to fight the 

iiiii) buy her a ring
and smile at her, because you 
love her, as you slip it on her
thin finger. then try not to
all the times that she looked like the sun,
and not just the shadow of the

iiiii.i) get the results
and hope for a little boy.
pat her back
and wipe her sea-storm tears. 
throw away
your unused baby shoes
and watch her stand for hours in the nursery
before you finally 
take her back to your room and undress her.

iiiii.ii) when she asks why you don't
make love to her anymore,
tell her that you're too tired. 
start seeing the neighbor's daughter,
because she's 18 and
doesn't sob half way through.
try not to cry because this girl
that you have riding the waves
between your legs
looks just like she looked
under you: like the world 
hovered above her navel cavity.

iiiii.iii) come home 
from your mistress' house
and find her note
pinned to the bathroom mirror,
right where she used to keep
the pictures from her ultrasound. 
read her scrawl,
and hold her overdose ridden body in your arms
until they take her away.

iiiii.iiii) wish
that you would have written about her
when you were sober.

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Pereyga Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like how this tells a story. And this is a very sad one
solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Student Writer
thank you :heart:
Pereyga Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome
abrizelle Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow, this brought an ache to my heart and tears to my eyes.
solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student Writer
CaptainDashkov Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hope4luck Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
damn. thats good

solis-ortus Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Writer
:D thanks
MisterTotality Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
Wow!!  I love so much of your writing, and this is certainly no exception!  There's so much feeling in this!
solis-ortus Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Writer
thanks! :D
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