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late morning-
early December. 
there's the tease of 
snow in the clouds,
in the air, and the trees
have finally lost their
last leaf. 

the sunlight is damp.
it hardly
alters the room
as it graces my skin,
and for once
i don't wake up right away.

instead i lay
between my memory bitten
sheets, and i think
about all the times he said
that he hated winter.
i don't remember
when i began to love it,
and i don't care.

it's beautiful.
nothing can shatter that.
goodmorning. wishing you all a good day.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"memory bitten sheets" :heart:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student Writer
:love:
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xColorblindRainbowx Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
amazING IMAGERY AAAH :iconblushplz: never stop writing!!
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!!! :D
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shep4life Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is excellent
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Writer
thanks :)
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shep4life Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course!
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Boxpet Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
Lovely! And good day to you too!
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! :D
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AJ-Dion Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Great piece.  I do agree with John about the use for Final and finally.  Maybe something like "finally ost their last stubborn leaves."  Just a suggestion.  But really great piece.  I love snow too.  :D (Big Grin) 
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Writer
I didn't eve notice that i put them do close together! haha, & thanks for letting me know :) & thank you
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De7h1nK13 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I wish I could write like you...

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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Writer
don't wish that-- everyone writes just like themselves, and that's the most beautiful thing in the world. 
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De7h1nK13 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yes. it is:)
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013   Writer
Yeah, this is a remarkable poem. The only critique I would offer is on the first stanza. You use 'final' and 'finally' in close proximity and it stalls the fluidity a bit. Other than that this is a well written piece as usual. I love your stuff. Thankyou for sharing this with us.

Regards,
John.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student Writer
it's been fixed-- thank you for pointing that out & your kind words. :rose:
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013   Writer
No problem. ;)
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