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you were my
conclusion- the last paragraph 
and the last thing
i got to say. 

i loved you and i
took words from
between my eyelashes and i
put them down for
you, i took you apart
a million times 
in my mind and always put you
back together-

and i drew
you, soft and silhouetted
against my
window, the pane
foggy and i thought of you
in the darkest of 
times, because i kept telling myself
that you were the
light (like you 
promised). 

i know that i am just
a girl with
too much heart and
too weak of ribs; but
i was hoping
that you would help the foxes
hunt the hounds, just for
tonight. 
/3 poems in one night? omfg i can write awE HELLL YEAH/
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:iconcarpefuckingdiem:
carpefuckingdiem Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful
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:icondhxjcrd:
dhxjcrd Featured By Owner May 8, 2014
Fob?
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:iconsolis-ortus:
solis-ortus Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Student Writer
fob :) :) 
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:iconabrizelle:
abrizelle Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. I especially love the third stanza. Wonderful. 
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:iconshep4life:
shep4life Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is quite intriguing 
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:iconemperorsinthecage:
emperorsinthecage Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
I love love love this poem!
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:icongladius212:
gladius212 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Congratulations on your ability to write. *has all the envy*
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:iconjadamslh:
jadamslh Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Nice images [some], especially at the end, but you need to let us into your experience a bit more. *You* know what you're referring to, but we don't. Opaque doesn't equal deep or meaningful [who are you writing to?] 

Of course, that means revealing some things that can feel risky, but there's a payoff on the other side; try it and then tell me what that payoff is...but keep writing. 
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