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i. 
our lips were chapped. it
was February and we
were so very young.

ii.
this was the first year
i died my hair black. we were 
only half in love.

iii.
it is heartbreaking,
because i can't remember 
where you kissed me first.

iiii.
you tasted like heat,
it was summer. i was
hardly just fifteen. 

iiiii.
with your tongue shoved down
my throat, you told me sex was
nothing to be feared.

iiiii.i 
part of me wanted 
you to be my last breath; the
last thing i saw bloom.
James, Nick, Mitch, Joe, Griffin, Blaize. 
I just realized that the names got weirder and weirder...
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:iconloveis4me:
LoveIs4Me Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love haiku's and just started my haiku diary, so this inspires me like mad.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! wow good luck :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't have words for this, I love it so much.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Student Writer
thank yyou :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :)
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barbzzp Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Student Writer
beautiful..the last line was staggering.  :)
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! :D
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barbzzp Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013  Student Writer
you're welcome Heart 
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013   Writer
An emotional series of Senryu. They were all open and strong, and they translate well. I couldn't pick a favourite - they are all amazing. Thankyou for sharing these with us.

Regards,
John.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much. :rose:
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JohnAshleigh Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013   Writer
Don't mention it. ;)
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silverthorne-studios Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't normally like haikus but these are all so beautiful and the idea is a wonderful one (:  So well done, I love this :heart:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! :D
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silverthorne-studios Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure! :aww:
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AdrianMinotaur Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You kind of show an evolution here, it's nice. Especially that last Haiku, from tired and Douchy (how I perceived five) to epic and lovely in the span of a few spaces :D
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! :D
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QueenApollyon Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
The idea of this is excellent....and this is so very beautiful. 
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2013  Student Writer
thank you. :heart: i must give credit to a number of different people who have done this before me. 
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QueenApollyon Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Student Writer
That's ok! ;)
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's such a brilliant idea, I've only kissed two boys who would deserve pages of explanation for they were the half that was in love...

Ugh, but it be wonderful if one day I'd be able to make such complex emotions into concise explanations. :) 
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much :heart: 
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're very welcome! La la la la 
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GeorgiaFern Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
I swear to god I read your work and get so jealous because it sparks all these memories and ideas but i know i won't be able to replicate them nearly as methodically and beautifully as you.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
that's how i feel about yours. :la: & thank you so much!
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GeorgiaFern Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
You're most welcome sweetheart! :glomp:
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013   Writer
"part of me wanted 
you to be my last breath; the
last thing i saw bloom."

that is the kind of line that will be forever 
immortalized and a hundred years from now 
people will read it and be in absolute awe. 
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much. this means so much, you have no idea. :rose:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
thank you!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome!
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I dare say this is my favorite piece of yours. Ever.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! :D
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome, love! 
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EmmaWatson666 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
great idea, and good hiakus. the last one has a typo, but w/e
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! & i just found it :)
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