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i cut my mouth
on the thought of you.

blood fills my
harsh tongued mouth and dr
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down my trachea. 
the taste of all the
half conversations and
fragmented thoug

(i want the forbidden fruit- the leaves turn into poison; they are unforgiving, a diligent contrast against my sins. we are not a love story; we are a tragedy, my dear.)

-hts.

then i choke.
the thoughts and not
there memories and the blood,
it cascades/crashes into
my perpetually empty lungs.

(baby, i swear, sometimes i think i'm dying. there's this crushing weight inside of me, in my chest, and it beats and grinds against my bird bones. i am so hungry for you; and i am in the habit of starving myself. anything that leaves less of a dent on you. i stay thin, you stay sane, and the world keeps spinning faster and faster and fasterandfaster.)

anatomically speaking,
i am dead. 
drowned
from the inside out, and
the leviathan left me out to 
dry. i am an old
damp sheet; you 
may just be the breeze
with the bite of 
spring. 

we are the kind of
people that have died
long before
we ever learned to 
live. and while i was 
teaching myself just to stand up and
breathe, you
were already exhaling the
universe.
i got tangled in your
breath. 

(there are miles upon miles upon mies of roads stretched belly up between us, and all i want to know is how you look when you blow the hair off your lips, mid dream and tender. but you're beautiful like the sun is beautiful; i resemble more of the planets than i do a ball of flame. i am solitary by nature, but this galaxy is paining me. how much difference is there between the highway and the milkyway?)

when you go, like i know
you will, you will leave 
with me
still dazed and half in love with
you. i will still
be carving your name into my moons
and i will be choking on Pluto when
you close the door. 

i will not chase after you;
and i will always wonder why
i didn't.

goddammit i can't do feels
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Such original imagery here. And such a story you've told, love the mix of poetry and prose (or maybe prosetry? bah, idk) in this.

So I have to disagree and say that you can very much do feels.

And I'm curious: if you were to title this, what would it be? Because this does feel a little incomplete without a title, but I think that's only because I know you're capable of a magnificent title for this. :heart:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Student Writer
thank you so much :heart: 
even when i reread this, i can't think of a title. i don't know why. but i'm determined now to think of one. so thanks again. :rose:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have no doubt that you will. This is probably my favorite thing I've read by you to date. :rose:
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MadamGuillotine Featured By Owner May 31, 2014
The formatting to this is incredible!
I'm very inspired by this piece. 
Absolutely exquisite, my dear.
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Abby7horizon Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow.

Wonderful composition.

VERY original.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Student Writer
thank you much :)
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Abby7horizon Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This poem is truly beautiful. And sad, and deep, and tragic... very good job
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MisterTotality Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014
You can't do feels, my ass!!  This is incredible!
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student Writer
thank you :heart:
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blubbityblub Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
YOU CAN DO FEELS
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